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Trains
They've unusual capacity for focus, boredom, work and conversations.
They're magical place that you can choose for price of ticket.
Almost unlimitef possibilities in one place, so SO many vastly different people
It's feeling similar of going to match so you can watch a game and realising that all those people probably have a job ,family, life
You are just the grain of sand in the dessert

(Let me know if there is any grammar mistakes)
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Alstroemeria's profile pictureAlstroemeria
oohhh i really like this! you've captured this sort of energy that trains ahve that i was always dimly aware of but nevr though to name until you did! I get that feeling o f"oh wow thats a person with a whole entire life" a lot, and i really like the way you've paralleled that with trains here - we're all going past each other on our own tracks. You're missing a couple articles in the second line ("choose for the price of a ticket") but there's definitely potential for experimenting with articles in poetry which could be rlly cool! overall i just really like this piece!
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Thanks for noticing the mistake
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Lotus's profile pictureLotus
I want to experience the feeling of going on a train. Trains to me could represent life, people come and go till each different person reaches their destination, I think I even read a poem about this too!
Your poem reminded me of it, it's really beautiful :)
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