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part 2!
TW: blood, discussion of death, rot
He tried to dive, once. Tried to follow a sinking carcass as it plunged into the darkness. But he was small. And the further he went, the more the ocean weighed on him, the more it pressed on him from every direction. The more he felt it crushing him, slowly, slowly, until his ears popped. Until clouds of blood, his blood, bloomed from where his ears bled, obscuring his vision. Until the water he pulled through his gills tasted duller and duller and he needed more and more but still he was getting dizzy. Until the weight of the water made it harder to move in any direction but down.

Until he felt a hand on his tail. Floyd, wordlessly gazing at him, imploring him to come back up. Blood was clouding by his ears too, mirroring Jade once again. Floyd’s wide eyes were unblinking and filled with fear, but despite it, he didn’t try to pull Jade back up. Didn’t scold, or demand, or plead, at least not out loud. Just had his hand there, on his tailfin.

That was enough to convince Jade to swim back up.

He didn’t dive again. He never did find out what happened, until he came on land.

There he was able to read from their bound sheafs of dead trees (this was what they called books, up here, a far cry from the carved and stained tablets of the ocean). Those said that dead in the ocean sank and sank until they fed all that they fell to, all the way to the seabed, even bones picked apart by worms.

How ironic that he learned of the depths all the way up here.

The explanation makes sense for the ocean. It’s very fish eat fish down there, even in the relative shallows of his home. Nothing stays dead for long.

But up here on land there is no such rush.

So that's a wrap! Any feedback is greatly appreciated, I want to know how to improve. I feel like in some places its a little hammy, like, overdramatic, but ehhh i can't really put my finger on it or place how to fix it (•̀⤙•́ ).
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TW: Blood, discussion of death and of rot

hey folks remember how I posted on here a lil fragment a while back and said I would work on the whole piece and polish it and flesh It out into a solid narrative?
Yeah lmao I did none of that.
What I did do was write another chunk of it. Tbh like the last piece this was already like 90% done I just polished it a lil.
A couple clarifications - this, like the last piece, is from jade’s pov - jade is a merman who later goes on land, this piece focuses largely on when he was a kid in the ocean. Floyd is his twin brother. Yes, this is fanfic, twisted wonderland fanfic.
And it’ll be 2 parts.

Rot is inevitable.

Jade knows this. He’s very glad to.

Azul doesn’t care for rot. He finds it unpleasant. Disgusting. Unsanitary. Any rot anywhere in his kitchen, his lounge, his dorm, is to be scrubbed out with extreme prejudice. Jade’s room is the only place left untouched.

Floyd, too, does not appreciate it. He finds it sad. The loss of something that could have been enjoyed. Rot to him is a missed opportunity. He couldn’t be further from the truth.

They are both so wrong. Rot is life. Rot is new opportunity.

In the sea, everything that died sank. It all sank deeper than Jade could swim. He would ask some of the other mer, the whale mer, shark mer, tuna mer, swordfish mer, who could swim deeper. They would tell him how all dead sank, which he knew well enough, and how they would be slowly eaten by whatever was below as they sank, but they could not tell him what happened when a carcass reached the bottom. Even they could not swim that deep.
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i love to roleplay, i used to do it on forums a long time ago, then on discord but its hard to find roleplay partners :(

so! where do you usually rp? do you have a fandom you like to rp in? or do you prefer to be fandomless?
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I want to post something in the lounge but I'm not sure, but i hope you all are safe. I woke up to see ICE around my city arresting people. They've been getting more aggressive lately and its been hard seeing all of it. My family and I have been checking up on our people and trying to keep them safe. Please be careful out there and please be safe
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Hey hey people, Bot here.

Ekh, if only I had mind to say interesting things about myself. Let's see... Oh yes, I like cooking, all things pertaining to the culinary arts. I also like learning about the tools used to further politics by other means, by that I mean weaponry! Yes, all means of weaponry are very interesting. I also like to read, and worldbuilding is also interesting. Now, if you wish to know more you ought to ask me here.
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i know this shoulnt be the place where i yell a the clouds but i just had one of the things that left me feeling uneasy to say the least, so quick context i have a male friend and i thought we were getting along nicely so i asked him out and he only said hell think about it, its alright i thought but then he blocked me on instagram and to that i have some words for him, your anorexic ass can rot in hell next to my dad for all i care and you and your emo hair burn to a crisp, i know im stupid for feelin attached to someone i only knew for like 6 months and bein head over heels for him but you could have just say no and the page wouldnt be blank but the end you freak of nature, i hope you have a beautiful wife and two children, spend the rest of your days on a haouse on the top of a hill with flowers everywhere, while i still cant find a place where i feel invited, i have never been comfrotable being in my skin and this isnt teaching me a way to improve and become better but im chosing that i shoulnt jump the gun or ask anyone out never ever because a moron like myself only wants a place where everything goes like he planned but really you are a fucking sissy for not sayin no and just blockin me you manlet
sorry for the foul language
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Somewhere 'round last year, i have a massive hyperfixation on my own oc and i LOVE drawing him
So today i'd gladly present to you, Astrer! I haven't really decided completely on his story because all i have a lot of ideas! This lil drawing i made of him has one of the ideas in it :P
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Hi, this is the first post and I'm on the bus back to home.

Nice thing is that I made some yummy pastries, like crossiants and Plain au Chocolat, along with some Anzac biscuits. I'll be honest, i've ate half of the crossiants I took, so... Yah, they were good! :D

I'll be sending in random shit for like every 4 days to a week depending on my motivation. Better tab this website or I'll forget.
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I've been playing Mortal Shell II recently and OH MY GOODNESS IS IT PEAK. The story had me in shivers. Also SPOILER WARNING for the beginning of the game!!

But I was in shambles when the Harbingers "shell" died to that rock golem. Like oh my lord, I felt so heartbroken. I mean the shell sacrificed himself just to save me. I felt so bad, but after going foward I realised that was JUST THE PROLOGUE?! My jaw DROPPED, not even joking, I was FLABBERGASTED at the title drop. Beautiful scenery and amazingly optimized. Like I have a 4060ti which is pretty middle of the road but still getting a consistent 60 fps on some insanely gorgeous scenes (and I mean these scenes were large landscapes) and yet having no stutter at all! It's amazing, truly, truly peak cinema.

100/10 I love this game and the story is amazing, great game to get into soulslikes

also did I mention that it's a soulslike?! I was shocked, I mean the game is punishing but it isn't ragebait like other souls/soulslikes ive played. Thats just my rant I had to talk about it cuz its just SO PEAKKK
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There's a con coming up in my area and I really wish I could go. I havent gone in a few years for various reasons but I miss the experience. So here's a look at my ita bag, it doesn't have many pins or anything fancy but I still really like it.
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